Primary Six: A Fire
submitted by Clarice, Primary Six, Submitted as a writing practice
Composition Practice (1st Draft)
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First thoughts...
It is not easy to write about a fire. However, if we read sufficiently about how it spreads and its effects, we can easily use (and reuse) the terms, words and phrases to inject details into our writing about it. I, myself, was very much inspired by an article in a magazine.
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It is not easy to write about a fire. However, if we read sufficiently about how it spreads and its effects, we can easily use (and reuse) the terms, words and phrases to inject details into our writing about it. I, myself, was very much inspired by an article in a magazine.
You can read about a piece of writing inspired by it here.
Below are the comments & suggestions for you composition:
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Hope my feedback & suggestion are useful to you and other pupils looking for resources on writing about a fire!